If you were really God,
Like you think you are,
You’d put bar codes on the clouds,
Charging us by the second for views.
We would be allowed one breath
Every ten seconds, but
We’d have to pray for each one in between.
Because our parents are saving
Their pennies to get into heaven,
We’d all wear the same t-shirts
And sleepy pajamas our mommies
Put on us at birth, stretching them
On a special machine, invented by you.
(For a small fee.)
If the cloth became too thin for modesty,
We could color it with a magic marker
That was soaked in water.
(For a larger fee, markers are expensive!)
You would say luxury is blasphemy,
But who can afford luxury
When sunlight is so costly
And water so very dear.
A world of beggars at your feet,
You wouldn’t give so much as an old toenail,
Never mind your only son.
Powerful and vibrant lines. Each line can stand alone independently. Very nice work. My favorite poem by you so far. Keep writing.
Thank you!!
Blasphemy can sure be beautiful sometimes
Rofl at the sign “Lynn’s Motel” only because I know an inside pun!
and Wow I would not want to meet that type of person in this poem, but I do unfortunately know a few.
Wow! What a great poem, truly. Any line on an agent/publisher yet, CL? Also, have you checked out duotrope.com for literary magazines to send work to? It’s a great source and you might get a bit of money, too.
Oh, and love the snowflake effect on your blog! At first I thought there was something wrong with my computer! Anyhoo, keep up the good work.
Thanks ASJ! Well, I’ve got some submissions out, but no good words for me yet
Thanks for the tip I will check out duotrope.com!
Powerful, well argued and well written. ‘a world of beggars at your feet…’ prophetic – and we’re almost there!
No doubt David! lol
I agree with RandallDeanScott: This is my favorite poem by you so far! Very, very, VERY brilliant use of exaggeration and sarcasm combined to present the reality of God’s gift in fresh, pointed context.
Thought provoking poetry. Bravo.
it’s snowingggggg!!!!!!!!
A wonderful take on the present state of affairs. Truly brilliant lines, nicely done!
wow powerful verse…ha if our gods really did run the country or the business we might be in trouble…
bar codes on cloud… I almost can see it
I’ve known this guy! I swear. Fine and scathing indictment of parsimony taken to the nth level. Those last two lines are hard-hitting and(no pun intended) on the money.
Excellent satire!
love your work!! so powerful!
Sad that there really are people like that in the world. A thought-provoking poem, well worded.
impressive verse.
excellent message,
I would say, ‘you think out side the box”
but I don’t think you know what a box is (grin)
I love your poetry
Box……that is where they keep the chocolates…yes?
Opal is a cheap bitch, isn’t she? And I totally used to wet my magic markers to make them work again after they dried out.